Re: Critique: The World I Knew

Date: Mon, 10 Mar 2003 01:04:29 GMT
Newsgroups: rec.music.makers.songwriting
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seriously, I could see it both ways.....
if you think the melodic nature of this tune premotes love, then who
is anybody to say you're wrong.....but then again, it was written with
a reflection of memories in my first stab at the lyrical design....
It could easily be a love song, and I could simply change the idea
around.......my only debate in this argument, and it's only because I
desire the right direction, is that even children move away from their
friends.....it's not an age thing to be sad when you move away.
if this pop world we know is a child's market, I still think that
children will be able to relate to this sentiment and the sadness that
the song may convey, especially if they just switched schools, or
moved across state, etc......
IMHO I think it's more pure for a child like leanne rymes and/or
britney spears (especially when they started out) to sing about a lost
childhood friend....something they have had the experience of in their
short years on this planet, than to sing about true love, when they
probably have never tapped into that reality of life.....
one of my turnoffs in pop music is when child prodigy stars are given
love songs to sing by their labels when they haven't even reached
puberty yet......
but I have lived through both scenerios and could feel good about
singing either of the two themes....
just my two cents worth......
thanks for everybody's insight on this,
60 cycle hum
On 10 Mar 2003 00:38:28 GMT, email-address-deleted (TracyLOZ) wrote:
>>She is probably not old
>>enough to be that nostalgic about her childhood.
>
>Cough cough, splutter splutter!....oh, I see, that COULD have been a
>compliment, lol!
>
>Truly, I feel most passionate about this! Ordinarily I back down when people
>disagree with me co's I'm basically a wuss, lol and doubt myself a
>LOT....but...
>This is an awesome song with SO much potential.
>Think about it...if you're going to pitch it, who is your market ? Is it the
>old farts :) who are sitting back reflecting on their childhood or is it the
>younger crowd who think they're the only ones discovering and exploring "love".
>If you're thinking of pitching it to another artist ( I'm not sure whether
>you're wanting to BE the artist or pitch TO artists) who is singing this kind
>of style? To me it's VERY typical of the cute boy bands style that we have seen
>so much of these days...or just the cute boy artists anyway...:)
>Think about whats selling, who's buying...what are those songs about?
>This melody is so "today" it's not funny...If you can come up with a lyric that
>is as marketable as this tune, then I reckon you've got a heck of a chance with
>this one.
>Having said all that I realise this might create a spate of disagreements from
>the "old farts"....(and hey, I'm one too, lol! ) because the charm of this
>lyric IS there, there's no doubt about that, and I know some get all huffy
>about the marketability thing ( again, me too, but probably not as much as some
>:) ) but if it were MY song...and truly I wish it was, I'd be having a go at
>writing Lyric number 2, aimed at a younger crowd and pitching it !
>Tracy
>http://www.desertrosemusic.com/
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