Re: Self Medication - Critique

Date: Tue, 11 Feb 2003 08:30:40 -0600
Newsgroups: rec.music.makers.songwriting
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Weird. I figured it out. You know how you say in your text intro below
"Parts of me tell me to dump....", OK, I read while I'm waiting and then
listen and I hear on your lyric
"Self medication is a key and the rest of the dump is easy and free"
It doesn't work for me. The song is put together well. Love parts of the
vocal. But the recipe, and I think your chord progression in my case, is
not working. I do like the end, and I'm not being sarcastic. And I think
the "10' tall" and "self medicaiton" are both good hooks.
I'll listen again later... cause I may have been screwed messing with the
word "dump" in the lyric, which I couldn't believe when I heard it, and, of
course was not the case, except in my head.
tim/gmab
P.S. and my version of sum over time was an integral without biab, though
I've used it and will use it.
"Tom" <email-address-deleted> wrote in message
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> http://www.soundclick.com/bands/6/tomspoporamamusic.htm
>
> I would love for you all to take a listen. I have hopes for this song
> but feel it needs a different direction, but don't know where to take
> it. Any suggestions?
>
> Part of me tells me to dump it and just recyle some bits, but another
> part of me says there is some integral goodnesses to this song. I'll
> let you decide. Let it rip. I know it is an altered BIAB arrangment,
> but try to see beyond that a little.
>
> Thanks,
> Tom