Re: "Admission Price"

Date: Fri, 09 May 2003 23:15:03 +0100
Newsgroups: rec.music.makers.songwriting
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"David F. Cox" wrote:
> "David F. Cox" <email-address-deleted> wrote in message
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> >
> > "Andy Le Fevre" <email-address-deleted> wrote in message
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> > > "David F. Cox" wrote:
> > >
> > > >
> > > > I like the lyrics, good ideas, well expressed, but I do not like the
> > musical
> > > > treatment.
> > > >
> > > > David F. Cox
> > >
> > > doh - and I was quite proud of the 'soaring' guitar solo, bass movement
> > and
> > > orchestration!
> > >
> > > Maybe it was "over the top" - or was there some thing specific? (mood vs
> > lyrics
> > > perhaps...).
> > >
> > > Anyway, thanks for listening David,
> > >
> > > Cheers,
> > >
> > > Andy
> > >
> > > http://www.soundclick.com/bands/andylefevre_music.htm
> >
> > Sorry, time was / is short, I will try and express myself more fully and
> > constructively later.
> > DFC
>
> After a few more listens. There is a lot of good elements in the music, as
> you are justly proud of, though they do not all quite gel together for me.
> Perhaps you have spent too much time on this and over-worked it. The main
> problem, for me, is that the lyrics are intellectual whilst the music
> wanders between the romantic and atmospheric. My latest lesson I have
> learned from working on this forum is that clever lyrics + good music does
> not necessarily make a good song. They have to work together.
>
> See my post "True love".
>
> FWIW I usually turn up at the jam session at Liz-Eds at 11pm ish Thursday
> nights.
>
> David F. Cox
David,
Thanks for the thoughts and yes, the music/lyric mood is certainly an area I'm
trying hard to improve on.
Ahhh! - another poor soul slaving away on a classic RW composition! - I've had
a lyric for "Cable and Strings" for some time now but the lyrics are so obscure
('clever'?!) that RW was left speechless about them and even I can't figure out
what the hell is going on! (Maybe it's gonna be a Cold Play type of song!!)
I'll take a listen to TL and have a look at your lyrics...
Cheers,
Andy
PS - if your around Richard, I'll get back to you on C&S - apologies for the
delay...!
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/andylefevre_music.htm